1. Tylerd's Avatar
    Ok, first off I was wondering if any of you thought my following thesis statement is strong. Hopefully we have some good writers. Please ignore the controversial subject matter, I just need to make sure it is direct and to the point.

    Here it is.

    The current interpretation of the Second Amendment of the United States Constitution directly states that government leaders have absolutely no right to forbid private citizens from owning firearms. Therefore no ban should be imposed on the ownership of firearms in the United States.
    10-26-08 02:42 PM
  2. Crackberrykills's Avatar
    Looks good so far. Just put a comma after "therefore," and you should be well on your way. However, I am not sure I would take advice from a fellow CB cretin. hee hee.
    10-26-08 03:24 PM
  3. sharley2112's Avatar
    As long as this is a persuasive paper it sounds good. However, a good thesis will have 2-3 points to answer the question "why?"

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    10-26-08 03:54 PM
  4. Crackberrykills's Avatar
    I agree, however, I assume this is a middle or high school paper. In effect, the thesis sentence the OP has appears to be on the right track.
    10-26-08 03:58 PM
  5. sharley2112's Avatar
    I agree. Very well written. Better to learn sooner, though.

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    10-26-08 04:46 PM
  6. Crackberrykills's Avatar
    Most assuredly. That is always a good thing.
    10-26-08 04:53 PM
  7. exelant's Avatar
    Drop the wishy washy "should be" in favor of "shall not be".

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    10-26-08 05:48 PM